flight of the eagle, used by permission of Kristjaan Panneman
Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge #28, “a silent cry”
flight of the eagle
stepping into the world of dreams –
a silent cry
[.........(c) Chèvrefeuille]
message from my spirit guide,
pale head pacing the north wind
arctic air crushes
frost settles over rivers
cold bites off dreams
[…………..your two lines here]
Note: In Tan Renga, poets alternate writing of haiku and “rejoinders” which are two lines, seven syllables each. The first haiku was written by Kristjaan Panneman (Chèvrefeuille). His challenge is for another poet to add two lines to his 3-line haiku, making the combined poem a tan renga. I then added another haiku, and I invite anyone who wants to, please write a 2 line (ideally 7 syllables each) rejoinder to my new haiku in a comment or on your own post…
Further Note: Tan Renga is a Japanese poetry tradition of one author supplying a haiku and then next a 7-7 syllable rejoinder. (The form would be a tanka if written by one person, but is a tan renga if written by two.) Poets can alternate haiku and 7-7 rejoinders as long as they like, sort of a crazy poets party game.
Edit: Jules and Beth both added more rejoinders (aka 7-7s) and haiku, and we have written a long, dreamy sequence on Jules site. Thanks to everyone, this crazy poet has really enjoyed the back and forthing!!
References:
http://thewordshop.tripod.com/asian/Japan/tanrenga.html
http://thewordshop.tripod.com/asian/Japan/rengadef.html
http://encyclopedia2.thefreedictionary.com/Renga
65 thoughts on “Tan Renga Invitation: A Silent Cry”
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Friendly Fairy Tales 
Great party I must say 🙂
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LOL I’d go to another in heartbeat. It’s just my game. LOL
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http://juleslongerstrandsofgems.wordpress.com/2014/01/27/tan-renga-challenge/
continued with a haiku…
Thank you.
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Jules, I’m so happy you did. I imagine Beth will be happy, too. I dropped in a rejoinder. 🙂 Peace and Joy, Brenda
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Replied to your rejoiner and added both to my post 🙂
I remember reading that a class of students could go on for days…
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thank you both, it was great fun to be a part of this. i’d love to do this with my kinders, bet they could go on forever )
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I have a few errands …Ksbeth if you’d like to do the next, please be my guest. ~Jules
We could see how far it can go – still making sense 😉
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I wrote another Haiku on Jules site if you want to add another 7-7. 🙂
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added one more 7 7 )
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Where is your 7-7? I only saw one by Jules.
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swirling thoughts fly mystical
never landing in one place
(think it’s still awaiting moderation on her site) see j added one too, so i can add haiku instead ?
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Excellent, Jules found it and added it. I put one more haiku. LOL
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thanks and it’s fun playing poetry. as i told her, i’m okay with the words, but not so good with the tech )
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I’d say you have a latent poetry gene there somewhere. LOL
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thanks, i hope so and that’s really a compliment coming from you )
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Oh, I did the 7-7, but Ksbeth can add another haiku 🙂
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I bet they could. I find my kids respond well to rhyming couplets, they can just keep adding them. Especially if they are silly. Johnny Green was never seen/ unless his trousers were quite unclean. / His mother Mable always said, /”Because of the dirt, I should dress you in red.”
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It’s been fun! LOL
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arctic air crushes
frost settles over rivers
cold bites off dreams
as frost bite numb the fingers
snow dogs race hard to finish
blessings to you, Brenda. ♥
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Oh, I like it! Flying with the eagle to flying with the sled dogs, quite a journey, thank you for participating, Sun!
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Sorry for being late 🙂
http://skyvani.wordpress.com/2014/01/26/cold-bites/
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Love it! Thanks for participating. Hope your sleep was fabulous! I love the use of the word solitude. The extreme cold does give one such solitude in a way a way day cannot.
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Fly freely icy feathers
Soar higher to radiance.
I can’t stand the cold! Got to get that eagle up to the sunshine. 🙂 x
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Oh, lovely, I love your 7-7!! You are such a talented poet, my friend. Thanks for adding such beauty to my crazy poet game. 🙂 Warmly, Brenda
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And thank you for letting us all join in! I’d never heard of it before. 🙂 x
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One of my online friends participates. The haiku this time was so stirring, I couldn’t resist. 🙂
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My two lines:
frosty land disturbs the glide ,
need rest and warmth near the end
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Love your rejoinder!! I have a mug of hot chocolate for you! 🙂
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Fax it over.
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Didn’t you get it through your ISB port? Uh, oh, maybe it’s stuck! LOL
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That’s why my laptop shorted out. I thought I smelled chocolate there for a minute.
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That’s right! LOL
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Nice continuation of the Tan Renga Brenda and what a good idea to invite another poet to conclude your haiku given here. Very nice idea …. maybe I can make it a Special feature for Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.
arctic air crushes
frost settles over rivers
cold bites off dreams
together with my love
cozy in front of the fire place
Well … have a nice weekend.
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Oh, I like you bringing it back around to a warm place. Well done!! And yes, please feel free, I would be honored.
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I will start creating this new Tan Renga Challenge ‘update’- I am honored that I may use your idea. Thank you Brenda.
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I’ve gotten some good 7-7s in my comments, it’s made me ridiculously happy. 🙂 I’d love to do it again.
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Well … I am preparing that new special feature right now. I have named it ‘Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge Squared. I will publish ASP …
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Thanks.
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Love spirit guides in your tanga duet ~ thanks for visiting ~ am pressed for time but would love complete your tanga ~ happy weekend ~ carol, xxx – http://www.acreativeharbor.com
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Perhaps we can play the crazy poets game another time. Are you the poet in Cape Ann? If so, I live very close to you… Happy Weekend to you, too!
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I like the idea of a crazy poets party game, although I’m not crazy enough to party at the moment. Oh, maybe it’s because I’m not quite awake! 😉
Tan Renga Shadows
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No rush needed, and your image of the eagle landing in the desert is wonderful.
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That was very well done. You captured the mood/spirit. I just could not do it, too hard.
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I liked your comment on his site a lot. And thanks!
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Wonderful and beautiful.
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Thanks!!
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Brenda, I’ll read, you’ll create. I’ll appreciate. Take care, Bill
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Okay, my friend, likewise. Your posts are creations, too, you know. 🙂
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This is very interesting I never cease to be amazed at how little I actually know about poetry. Thanks for another great lesson.
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I like the way the Japanese poets cup images in their hands like flowers. 🙂
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yes that in itself is a poetic image!
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Thanks!
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😉
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arctic air crushes
frost settles over rivers
cold bites off dreams
embers falter into ash
icy echo of what’s gone’
(I thought you wanted a completion)
I liked your spiritual completion
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I liked my completion, but when I read about tan rengas going around and around, in many stanzas, I was intrigued and I thought about what a great beginning we had, with the eagle entering the dream world, the silent cry, the spirit guide, and I thought about where it would go from there. I see you have taken it even further, thank you. What fun this is!
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never one to be deterred,
continues with graceful strength.
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I love it!! What a great 7-7!! Yeah, Beth!! I hope you share this with your kids!
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thanks it was a lot of fun ) and i will )
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Woohoo! Determined to go forward 😀
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Woo-hoo! 🙂
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I see the eagle as not only majestic but as a strong spirit guide — there is something “royal” about them!
I like your rendition and additional Haiku with it!!
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Thanks! I often like to turn corners. 🙂
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😀
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