after Terrance Hayes’s lines:
sing until our blood is jazz,
we swing from June to June
Our skin is too tight. We need to sing,
our spirits folded into cranes, until
we can no longer stop our
words from spilling like blood,
each drop telling a truth that is
unfolded, unplanned, trumpeted jazz.
As our inner life spirals outward, we
bleed our truths, on an upswing,
remembering poet-words from
Brooks to Hayes, in beats of hot June
nights, city pulses, country hums, to
crescendo every reckless, starry June.
Copyright 2017 Brenda Davis Harsham
Notes: Golden shovel poems pay homage to the work of other poets, yet bring something new from the borrowed words. From their birth, these poems shed new light in the dark places of our hearts. My first golden shovel poem is a tribute to the first written by Terrance Hayes, who made speaking truth look easy. Want to try your own? You take each word from an excerpt/quote of your choice and use it to end each line of a poem, making sure to give credit.
Thanks for sharing your golden shovel! I love “our spirits folded into cranes” and the image of cranes trumpeting. This poem really is a tribute to Brooks and Hayes. I love that you wove them into it. It was tricky with two June words, but I think the last line is fine.
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It didn’t make my heart sing, but it felt fine. Weak praise from me, too. Perhaps one day the right line will appear out of the blue. Writing is like that.
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
NOT…GASP, GASP, WHEW?? 🙂
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Wonderful, Brenda! You are really sharpening your tact! 😀 xx
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Thanks, Resa. XOXO
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What an intriguing concept! Nice work!
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Thanks! 🙂
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Beautiful!
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Thanks, Jessica! Long time, no see. I’ll swing by and say hi.
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Thanks, Jessica! Long time, no see. I’ll swing by and say hi. Oops, I can’t follow your link. Did you delete your site?
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Hi Brenda! No, I haven’t deleted my site, weird that you cannot view it! It’s called Life is Beautiful. Hopefully you can check it out. Take care.
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As always you try for perfection and it becomes the hardest word when it’s a deed … But add just IN to the deed and it becomes an answer to a questiion from within … Great post .. From a great lady … ⭐️😊👍🌹
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Thanks, Ian. You are a true friend. Now that I’ve written one, there will be others. 🙂
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So glad …😊
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what an interesting style – i love your take on the passing of time –
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Thanks, Beth. It’s a challenging form. I really wanted a different last line, but having to end in “June” really stumped me. I’m still thinking wondering if I accomplished what I wanted. Writing is imperfect sport. No clear winner or loser.
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Very cool.
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Thanks, Gigi. So sad when August dwindles toward September.
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Cor–that first stanza especially. Beautiful job!
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These are words which communicate the music of life and the vital force music is.
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Yes, music is vital. Thanks!
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Fantastic
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Thanks!
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My Pleasure!!
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Fantastic reproduction and further expansion! 😎😎😎🥀🥀🥀
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Thanks, Dorna!
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