One
Tiny
Chickadee:
Playful, hungry,
Hopping, chattering,
Finding bird feeder seed,
Darting to her Red Roof Inn.
Squirrels chase along high wires,
Chittering, chattering, fat from greed.
Thin bird chides them, twittering, fluttering.
Copyright 2014 Brenda Davis Harsham
Note: This poem is an etheree, for another or an explanation of the form, click here.
38 thoughts on “Playful Spring Etheree”
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I love how the words you chose give a sense of the bird’s motion (the flittering of chickadees!). It really makes you see the bird’s flight through words!
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Kirsten, Oh, what a nice thing to say, thanks!! They were really active and hopping all over. It made me stop and smile. I was surprised my camera was able to capture the bird so clearly. Thanks for commenting! Warmly, Brenda
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Hi Brenda! Beautiful Etheree.. How I love thee 🙂
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I love thee, too. 🙂 Thanks for stopping by with your delicate touch and lovely words. Cheers, Brenda
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A wonderful poem. It takes a lot of talent to write such an intriguing poem but to also make it into a perfect pyramid? Wow, well done.
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Thanks, I enjoyed the effort. Thanks for commenting! Warmly, Brenda
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You call it etheree, I call it a cool beautiful original poem. It´s a pyramid for crying out loud, never saw this tipe of poetry. Nice.
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I thought the form suited the moment. The quieter I was, the busier the tiny critters got, the bolder, louder and more feisty. It thought the progression of the pyramid helped convey that. Always happy to see your comments, Charly! Take care, Brenda
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Never heard of an etheree before, Brenda. What a lovely little device – and a great poem.
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Kate, I wrote my first etheree, believing I had invented the form, but as is true with so many things, someone was there before me. Luckily I like to do research, so I didn’t embarrass myself. I like the research you do, too. 🙂 Cheers, Brenda
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The spirit of chickadee, spring and squirrel, delightfully captured.
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Thanks, I am delighted with spring this year. 🙂 I’m glad that is shining through.
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What a fun house. Any little fairies in there?
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Shh, don’t tell! The birds might just be scaring the squirrels away for a reason. 🙂 Hugs, Brenda
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I’m not typically one to go gaga over balance and symmetry but the way that poem looks (in addition to the content… and the photo) is absolutely delicious.
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Aussa, I’m so happy you stopped by my magic world. 🙂 Too much symmetry can be a bit oppressive, I agree, but I do like progressions, and that’s why I like the etheree. Are you enjoying your new fame? Or has it become oppressive. I have so much trouble keeping up that I’m not sure more fame would be good. Not that I would turn it down… LOL Warmly, Brenda
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Haha fame, what? Noooo…. What AM I enjoying, though? Being sandwiched by two space heaters that the Risk Manager thought he already confiscated from my office 😉
I love that you describe your world as magic 🙂 It certainly is.
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I thought I read on your site that something zipped around on twitter madly, and now you have lots of new followers. Perhaps I was drinking red wine that night. 🙂 It’s getting too warm here for space heaters. You must be pretty far north… But I won’t inquire too closely. 🙂
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Oh! Yeah, a viral post on Reddit. What a weird experience. But all is back to normal now, huzzah!
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Right, just enough wine to remember hazily then. Glad you are back to normal, but not glad your space was violated!! Was sorry to read about that!
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Ah, thanks. Such a dumb sort of thing to randomly come home to! The ultimate REALLY?!?! sort of moment.
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Not good! Not good at all!
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Just perfect…so much fun.
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Thanks!! It was a fun morning. 🙂
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🙂
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Gorgeous, Brenda – how clever, the structure and the words 🙂
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Thanks! I like the momentum in the etheree. Thanks for pausing and commenting! Warmly, Brenda
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Thank you for this lovely gift of writing this morning!!!! I can’t wait for you to make a published copy so I can hold in my hands and read when I wake up. 🙂
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Aw!! You are lovely! Thanks!! 🙂
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i love this poem and i love the form )
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Thanks!! You should write one. 🙂
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This is precious AND adorable 🙂 love love love love love love love 🙂
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LOL Thanks!! Love your comments. Hugs, Brenda
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So lovely Brenda!!! It made me smile and think happy thoughts! 🙂
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So glad, my friend. We all need smiles. 🙂
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OOOOOO I so love this entire thing! Great text layout! I love the pyramid! 🙂
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Thanks! It’s more my usual thing. I thought the Lament might be too dark. 🙂
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Not at all! I loved it. We all have different sides to us. Expressing is a good thing I think! 🙂
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